It’s Sunday tomorrow .I’m going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning .We are going to look for some good books .We all like reading books .We are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and vegetables .After lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake .Wow, that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.
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怎樣才稱得上是“美好的一天”?有兩點(diǎn)不能忘記，一是安排得充實(shí)，二是安排得有意義。這兩點(diǎn)小作者無疑都想到了，上午去書店看書買書，中午在飯店吃飯，下午去頤和園玩耍、劃船，豐富多彩!文章以時(shí)間為線索，敘述清楚，文筆也很優(yōu)美。
小朋友們在寫這種敘事的文章時(shí)，要盡量給讀者交代好時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物和活動(dòng)等，使文章有血有肉。要看好是寫過去發(fā)生的事情，還是現(xiàn)在正在做的事情，或計(jì)劃、打算要做的事情，以選擇適當(dāng)?shù)木湫?。如果是寫將來的事情，那么就要注意在表述時(shí)多用“be going to+動(dòng)詞原形”這種句型。還有一點(diǎn)也很重要，那就是故事的線索要交代好，讓讀者在閱讀時(shí)對整個(gè)過程一目了然。